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system_shocker |
Posted on 08/18/05 @ 10:42 PM
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The Conquerors 1.0c |
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Role Playing Strategy |
" Siege Of Dark Shallow"
Imbious was an elite swordsman on Desmond's legions back 5 years ago. Jealousy ran through Desmond's blood and started to despise Imbious because of his popularity among nations. Imbious had a wife named Mateo and an unborned son. 2 years after the marriage came to its end, Desmond had sent an assassin to kill Mateo and her unborned son. Imbious didn't know about this until The Shiztburg family informed Imbious through a formal dinner.
Imbious was devasted! He couldn't believe what has happened! He wanted redemption for this incident so he went to the king and asked for information about who killed his wife and son. Desmond didn't do anything. He just sat there on his beloved throne like an imbicile. Imbious went back the next week to ask for the information. Desmond didn't say anything.
He just sat there eating his grapes and acting like this is his hedonism. Imbious was outraged!!! He shouted so hard that the scream was heard throughout the castle walls!!! Desmond finally stood up and said" Don't you dare disrespect your king or severe consenquences will happen!!" he said in a booming voice. Imbious replied" But sire, don't you care about my wife or family?" He said with manners. "What is this nonsense!!! Guards!! Please escort this lowly human out of my sight immediately!"Said Desmond with anger. 2 Days later.....
Imbious was called upon the city hall were the guillotine was. Imbious shook in horror to was he was thinking.
Desmond called upon the intellectual monks and asked, " Should I execute this excuse for a fool or should I torture his life and send him to exile?".The monks thought about this for 2 long,grueling hours and finally made a decision.
Desmond called upon the villagers and soldiers for this town call. Desmond asked the town" Should I send this man to exile or should I send him to hell when he gets killed by the all mighty guillotine??" The town chanted" EXILE!EXILE!EXILE!EXILE!"
"Well I guess the town has spoken and the monks have their decisions so...... Imbious Careas, YOU... SHOULD...LIVE....IN.....EXILE!!!!!!!!!!
And I guess you gamers know what's next........
Imbious "The Raider", He found his way back to the kingdom and wants his revenge against King Desmond.Desmond has been ruling the land ruthlessly with no exception.Villagers and locals are complaining and those who were complaining were thrown out of the kingdom.
*This is fiction by me*
Scenario By:AJ aka System_Shocker
If there is anything you would like to contribute or suggest, just email me at pyrexian_slayer@yahoo.com
This scenario was intented only for AOKHeavengames to produce on its site. Anything else beyond that, contact me.
There will be more of this series so hang on....
"Siege Of Dark Shallow" 2004-2005
Author: System_Shocker |
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system_shocker
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Posted on 08/21/05 @ 03:12 PM
Please review and this is my 1st RPS so just give me more info on what to fix! |
Mk101 |
Posted on 08/22/05 @ 09:30 PM
Man , you got a great story there.I'll try it out and write a review immediately. |
Peej |
Posted on 08/23/05 @ 10:47 AM
ok... because some guy said people would review my stuff if i reviewed others, you are the lucky winner!!! good job. I'm going to download, review, and whatever right now! |
Peej |
Posted on 08/23/05 @ 11:27 AM
Ok, this is my first review, so it won't be perfect.
Playability: 4
The playability was good, but my one problem was it said get 10 sheep. i only could find 8 so i did marco polo to see if i was just stupid, and couldn't find them, so i looked at it in editor, and no, you only needed 8. (That trigger wouldn't work anyway) Just change that part, and do what I said below, and BAM! (Emril) its (Up a nother notch) maybe ever prety close to best of aok!
Balance: 2
This was the weakest part, all the heros had at least double most other units, and most had at least tripple. It was just too easy. and also it would be better, if it was like nobody could die or something. I killed every unit, and nothing happened. (Unless you run out of guys Duh!)Try to add more challenges, it would rock if you do what I said below.
Creativity: 3
The creativity earned 2.9 of the 3 points in the story of it. It was the same as most other rpg things, there were no out of the ordinary things. It was just, plain.
Map Design: 2
Ok, the map. You only used like 1/10 of the map. and even that 1 part, the only good stuff was that forest. (The haunted forest was pretty cool. If you worked on light and shaddow a bit, it would be great. Also, try using more of the map, like make you half to take over 2 other forts, get an army to follow you, (task it, don't make it yours) and use the whole map, or at least most of it!
Story/Instructions: 4
Ok, the story was the best part. It was a very good general idea. The reason it got a four, is there weren't any objective changes or anything. What I saw was charge straight foward, and kill kill kill. If you wanted to make this better, add more side quests, change objectives, add more story, and plot twist.
Additional Comments:
I half to say, this scenario, if given a bit more work, playtesting, and additions, would be a canidate for best of AOK. If this guy fixes it up a bit, its definetly worth a download! Even right now its pretty good![Edited on 10/23/08 @ 11:04 PM]
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system_shocker
File Author |
Posted on 08/23/05 @ 04:59 PM
Thanx this is just VERSION 1. Give me the details on what I need to fix and I'll fix it. V.2 Will come out soon I promise.Tell me the stuff i should add/fix on this email pyrexian_slayer@yahoo.com OK? |
Peej |
Posted on 08/23/05 @ 06:42 PM
Well, uh... I just said right there what needs doing. Read the review it says so. also, you don't need to make a new verson, just edit it. Remember, add more detal, and try to think of something original! |
Peej |
Posted on 08/23/05 @ 08:17 PM
OH, keep up the desinghning. if you work at it, you will defenetly get into best of aok.
Just spend along time fixing this, it might not get in, but if you spend two weeks working on stuff you will be rewarded. |
Peej |
Posted on 08/24/05 @ 08:52 AM
out of curiosity, I reviewed this, and the little stars haven't shown up on the outside.
Why is this happeneing??? |
skald |
Posted on 08/24/05 @ 04:26 PM
Peej, it's me again. I have five reviews submitted and the stars don't show up yet. Same thing with everybody else's current reviews. It's OK; don't panic. The reviews are pending approval by the Review Mods. Until they are approved, the stars don't show up. It may seem unnecessarily convoluted to have a reviewer who reviews reviews, but it's really a good thing, otherwise I could review one of my own scenarios and give myself straight 5.0's and a Distinguished Designing Cross with Oak Leaf Clusters. Be patient. And be prepared to not have your reviews approved without some changes; my first two reviews that I spent hours and hours playing and composing were not too hot and I had to retract them. It's a learning process. |
Peej |
Posted on 08/24/05 @ 08:52 PM
OH ok, thanks! anyways i think they just did! I think that means I did a good job :) |
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HGDL v0.8.2 |
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2.9 | Breakdown |
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Playability | 3.0 | Balance | 2.0 | Creativity | 3.5 | Map Design | 2.5 | Story/Instructions | 3.5 |
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Downloads: | 573 |
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Size: | 102.44 KB |
Added: | 08/18/05 |
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