Thinking of making a campaign of the concept,but I need feedback before I continue so I don't make a boring campaign.
Also,anyone who is good at handling scenario-intros/outros,need help with one thing about them so I'd appreciate it if you'd contact me as soon as possible.
Forest trees don't blend well in this desert-like area.
I think you should have a path of some kind, it would make sense.
From the signpost, going north leads to nothing, going northwest to the top of the map brings you to hidden units?...
Going west leads you to nothing. Going south and southwest brings you to people.
Give better directions.
Your sentences are a bit modern, if you're aiming for a joke or a modern scenario then it's fine.
Some of your dialouges gets overlapped by other dialogues.
Did you test this out yourself?
B3Y4Z1D File Author
Posted on 07/20/09 @ 11:16 AM
Now that you mention it,I did forget that north,east,west and south should be from the player's view.
I'll edit this scenario:
- Will add a path
- Remove the forest trees
- Adjust the signpost
- I'll also try to adjust the dialogues(would've been easier if you would mention which specific dialogues you meant)
And the modern language is supposed to be a bit of a joke for now,I am not sure if I want to make a serious or a more unserious campaign so I put it in to see the reactions of the players.
I have tested it many times over but it is a bit difficult for me to notice all the errors since I am the creator and it is my mind that produces the idea so I have no problems understanding the whole thing,that is why I have people try it out and tell me what I need to change.
So thanks for the help,I hope you'll try it out once I've corrected the errors and hopefully you will also tell me what you think of the story a bit. =)