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Topic Subject:I'd like you to review my song
Major Helper
AoKH Survivor, Mr. White Teeth
posted 08-28-08 03:05 PM CT (US)         
We've got some creative work in school, so I decided to make a song.

I know it sounds odd, but frankly, noone cares about that here

I was straining for something like funny and beautiful (lol) at the same time.

I believe the beat is 8/4 (twice as fast as the generic 1-2-3-4)

Wings to fly with

I wish I could have a pair of wings
Those white ‘n fluffy, wondrous things
With them I could fly right up into the sky

For you I would fly right around the world
From the Amazon humid to plains of snow
Wings of love never tire out

Our love knows no bounds
Like the appetite of starving hounds
With white wings I could bless
Our union, confess
My eternal love towards you

But then the stark reality
Hits like the necessity to be
For I lack those wings required to fly
To get the skill of flying
I must forget dying
When throwing myself down from a cliff

For me to achieve that
I must think like a bat
To see with not eye but my soul

With your tender love towards me
I’ll prove that laws mean nothing, you see
For our love knows no boundaries

And when I have done the impossible
Made flying without wings possible
Then we will be like a pair of doves
Carefree
You and me


I hope that wasn't too disappointing

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Powery
Squire
posted 08-28-08 03:22 PM CT (US)     1 / 11       
Maybe you should perform that song first.
morgoth bauglir
Squire
posted 08-28-08 03:32 PM CT (US)     2 / 11       
*cough*musicksthread*cough*

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Major Helper
AoKH Survivor, Mr. White Teeth
posted 08-28-08 04:41 PM CT (US)     3 / 11       
I'm not a singer

I can stay in beat, I remember words and get some feeling into it, but when we get to doing the notees, I'm out. Me being hearing impaired doesn't help either

but surely you can give me some kind of feedback with just the words and the basic idea of what I mean the song to be?

Sorry to disappoint you guys

(and whatever do you mean by that quaazi ?)

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Ornlu
Recreational Procreator
posted 08-28-08 05:54 PM CT (US)     4 / 11       
Have you tried... rapping it?

I wish I could have a pair of tittings
Those white ‘n fluffy, juicy things
With them I could fly 'til she gets dry

For you I would buy the entire world
From the African diamonds to some bling for your toe
My tool of love never tires out

etc

None of us are free, one of us is chained.
Gwame
Squire
posted 08-28-08 07:32 PM CT (US)     5 / 11       
^ You serious?

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morgoth bauglir
Squire
posted 08-29-08 02:07 AM CT (US)     6 / 11       
(and whatever do you mean by that quaazi ?)
That I just created a music thread and it would feel welcome there.

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Major Helper
AoKH Survivor, Mr. White Teeth
posted 08-29-08 03:48 AM CT (US)     7 / 11       
I see nothing that would connect your thread and mine except for the fact they're both of music yours somekind of poll thread and speak about music here, whilst mine ask for an opinion of my own song.

Hell no to rap!

So far, all the comments about my song have been positive (serious ones anyways...) except for the few mutterings about why the hell I did this in english and not in Finnish as any "sensible" Finnish guy would

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Lord Basse
MI6 Scenario-Making Machine
posted 08-29-08 09:54 AM CT (US)     8 / 11       
Well the lyrics were amusing, but I can't imagine a song suitable for it. Still amusing though .

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Surge
Squire
(id: Lt_Surge99)
posted 08-29-08 01:59 PM CT (US)     9 / 11       
ROFL @ Ornlu. I knew all of you dark guys have the rhytm and rhymes in the blood.

Major Helper, I was preparing to lass my augh off, but the lyrics aren't actually bad. Nice.

"Especially awe-inspiring is the fact that any single brain is made up of atoms that were forged in the hearts of countless stars billions of years ago... These atoms now form a conglomerate – your brain – that can not only ponder the very stars that gave it birth but can also think about its own ability to think and wonder about its own ability to wonder. With the arrival of humans…the universe has suddenly become conscious of itself. This, truly, is the greatest mystery of all." - Rama

[This message has been edited by Surge (edited 08-29-2008 @ 02:00 PM).]

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Squire
(id: Lord_Fadawah)
posted 08-29-08 09:06 PM CT (US)     10 / 11       
I believe the beat is 8/4 (twice as fast as the generic 1-2-3-4)
Uh wouldn't that be 4/8?
Major Helper
AoKH Survivor, Mr. White Teeth
posted 08-30-08 06:46 AM CT (US)     11 / 11       
ok whatever you say

thanks for the comments ya'll!

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