Alright, hi again, Cainito!
I played your map, and I want you to know that I thought it was pretty good! You are off to a great start in scenario designing!
First off, there weren't many trigger problems at all, you actually did surprisingly well, this being the first time you made a scenario.
You should work on your eye-candy techniques a little (Looks of the map, I hope you understand what I'm talking about...), but I can see that you did try and you did very well with the eye-candy you provided.
I particularly liked the desert: you used elevation very nicely, it was rather realistic. You used the mountains fairly well, but it could use improving.
The story and ideas of the map were very nice; they were simple and I like that just as much as an elaborate plot, the only thing that matters is that the plot isn't crap. Your plot wasn't crap at all.
You used the display instructions dialogue very well, the triggers worked out fine for that. The map seems to have had a lot of good work put into it, and I liked that.
Overall, the map was very nicely done. A great start for someone like yourself that is going into scenario/campaign design. I strongly encourage you to continue with your scenario design as I liked your scenari and it will help you get even more practice then you already have.
Well, that is my review of your map, let me recap:
There weren't many trigger bugs, the landscape and eye-candy was nice, but you could improve your techniques to make it even better. The story was nice and simple, just as good as an elaborate plot, it was a very nice plot and very originial.
Well, I suppose this post is long enough and you get the point, so, I will talk to you later! Happy scenario designing!
Denerin Kosaiko
Creator Of: None Finished Yet
Working On: "X" - Trade Cart Racing
Founder Of Templar Creations
Zone Name: Lord_Denerin