Hah, thanks! The latter option.
I mean, yes, while I was pretty satisfied with the overall quality of the campaign's storyline (after reworking it from the ground up). But there was clear room for improvement and greater and subtler dialogue (talking more naturally about the diverse aspects, characters and elements for the story). That especially applies for overall the both brothers' motivation as characters, which is an issue I plan to heavily address in this novel (mostly at the beginning of their 'journey').
btw, updated the text w several word choice improvements, adjustments and such:
here (updated the op as well)[This message has been edited by rewaider (edited 03-14-2021 @ 03:38 PM).]